Blog post due -- discuss your progress (500 words) -- think about the feedback you have received from your peers -- how will you change your scene to address that feedback? This can be due over the weekend. You shouldn't do it until after you get feedback

Blog post due -- discuss your progress (500 words) -- think about the feedback you have received from your peers -- how will you change your scene to address that feedback? This can be due over the weekend. You shouldn't do it until after you get feedback

This week my group performed our first draft of our play where we learned many things and where we learned that our play is far from perfect. There are still many improvements we need to make to the script and with my own individual acting.

My first mistake was my picture of who my character is. Part of the problem is that I pictured him as two different people. There is the professional radio broadcaster, and there is a young adult who has a crush on a girl. One of these characters is boring, respectful, and plain while the other one is a very lively person. When at work my character would be more proper and with the girl it wouldn’t be formal. From the feedback, I realized that this logic was tragically flawed. First off, the girl I have a crush on came to the radio place. I cannot be professional and respectful while hitting on a girl at my workplace in an utterly awkward manner. I need to completely reconstruct who my character is as a person. I still haven't quite figured this out, but I definitely need to give him one personality. I learned that I am not talented enough to do two different personalities. I will end up merging them giving it a creepy vibe. So I will need to figure this out. On top my own individual work, that needs to be improved our script needs to be improved. There are many things that need to be done.

First off our script is way too short. Our play was around eight minutes which means we have a lot of work to do. Not only do we need to make new scenes but we need to learn them in a short notice. There are some small things we can do to help lengthen the play such as speak slower. We can also involve more action and hesitations. Our play is all talk there is no silence. Yet, there are perfect opportunities for silence. When I am writing my letter I can pause at times for dramatic effect. We can add non-verbal parts where we walk on the beach and don’t say anything but have fun. This will help extend our scenes that already exist. Additionally, we will need to add scenes. Perhaps we can add another date scene where we are eating dinner. This can add time because people don't often talk fast at dinner. They may take their time to enjoy the food, and enjoy the moment. All of this should help prolong our play. In addition to increasing the duration of the play, there is a petty problem in the script that needs to be fixed. In the radio broadcast, I used the town of Riverdale which is an American name. I need to some up with a name in Hadi that would be used and we have to make some of the themes in our play more Hadian. This is a challenge coming from american writers.

Mastering my character's personality should be a tremendous help in addition to increasing the length of the play. Our play still has a lot of work that needs to be done, but with hard work we should accomplish it to form an amazing final product.