Friday, December 16, 2016

Written Coursework draft 3

Jack Hartigan
IB Lit and Perf
Ms. Guarino
December 6, 2016
Fire-Eyed Fury
In class, we performed the classic play Romeo and Juliet, written by William Shakespeare. This is one of the most well-known plays written in the Elizabethan era. In summary, the play is about two star-crossed lovers, living in Verona Italy, who will do anything to be together. Our performance mainly focused on the fight scene in act three scene one. Additionally, I included Tybalt’s monologue in act one scene five. In both of these scenes, Shakespeare uses analytic devices to portray a theme of vengeance and a tone of fury and violence; to illustrate Tybalt’s indignant characteristics I incorporated theatrical features such as costuming, body language, movement, and tone of voice.
Shakespeare shows character development in the contrast between Tybalt and Romeo. At first, in this scene, Romeo felt a great love towards Tybalt. Except, it is hard to love such a menace. “But love thee better than thou canst devise Till thou shalt know the reason of my love.”(3.1.40-41) Recently, Romeo married Tybalt's cousin Juliet in secret inducing Romeo’s abrupt love for Tybalt. Except, Tybalt does not want peace; he is eager to fight and out for blood. Hence, Tybalt kills Mercutio sparking Romeo's new distaste for Tybalt. “And fire-eyed fury be my conduct now! Now, Tybalt, take the villain back again.”(3.1.86) In this quote, Romeo vows to get vengeance. To some extent, I would expect Tybalt to take pleasure from this. Fighting is his passion and what he is trained for. Consequently, Tybalt's rage essentially leads to his death. Tybalt's hostility changed Romeo from a kind-hearted man to a ruthless killer. This leads to the climax where Romeo kills Tybalt. Tybalt's uncontrollable fury and thirst for blood led to his inevitable death.
Throughout the scene, there is a theme of vengeance where the noble characters follow Hammurabi's code: an eye for an eye. This innate sense of vengeance foreshadows upcoming events.  Vengeance seems to be valued above all else: even law and family. It begins with Tybalt seeking revenge on Romeo. “Boy, this shall not excuse the injuries That thou hast done me. Therefore turn and draw.”(3.1.37-38) When Romeo won't fight, Tybalt kills Mercutio instead. This triggers Romeo's innate sense of vengeance, causing him to track down and fight Tybalt. “Either thou, or I, or both, must go with him.”(3.1.91) In this quote, Romeo says he will risk his own life in order to kill Tybalt, showing how vengeance is valued above all else. Even Mercutio used his lasts breaths to curse the Montagues and Capulets. “A plague o' both your houses!”(3.1.59) In this quote, Mercutio foreshadows the upcoming future. There are two ways that this foreshadowing could be interpreted. First off, it could be predicting the immediate future where Tybalt is killed and Romeo is banished. Secondly, it could foreshadow Romeo and Juliet’s deaths where both houses suffer a loss. Either way, this accurately portrays the theme of blood for blood and betrayal.
In addition to foreshadowing, Shakespeare frequently uses metaphors with a tone of hatred. For example, Tybalt refers to Romeo as a “slave”(1.5.54) to empathize his distaste for Romeo. Additionally, it shows Tybalt's narcissism and his arrogant personality. Another example of a metaphor is when Mercutio contemptuously calls Tybalt a “ratcatcher”(3.1.46) or cat: “Good king of cats, nothing but one of your nine lives, that I mean to make bold withal, and, as you shall use me hereafter, dry-beat the rest of the eight.”(3.1.48-50) This quote has a serious and threatening tone. Based off the superstition that cats have nine lives, Mercutio threatens to take all of Tybalt's lives and implies that he will slaughter Tybalt. On the other hand, this metaphor uses humor calling him the king of cats. This allusion is ironic because Tybalt is viewed as a villain in the eyes of others and would not be expected to be called a king of anything. Yet, in the Shakespearian time, cats were used as pawns used to catch rodents. Their sole purpose in life is to remove nuisances from the homeowners. This directly applies to Tybalt, a trained swordsman, whose sole purpose in life is to serve and fight for the Capulets. In addition to that deep-seated insult, Mercutio uses an allusion to show Tybalt's gruesomeness: “dishonorable, vile submission!”(3.1.44) This shows the constant conflict between Tybalt and other characters throughout the play. The metaphors used in the play have a tone of fury and violence. The language in the rising action of the play such as “outrage”(3.1.54) and “fire-eyed fury”(3.1.86) expresses the tone. Fire-eyed fury is an alliteration that accurately represents Tybalt's character. These literary devices build a hostile environment. It adds a sense of suspense to the rising action, leading up to the climax where vengeance is taken and someone is slain.
After memorizing the scene, I acted it out. Acting came with the responsibility of making many crucial decisions. Every choice I made in this retrospect was to portray Tybalt as an evil and confident character. The first choice I had to make involved my positioning. I chose to face slightly towards the audience to so they could see me, but at the same time, I could be looking at the other two actors. When looking at them I would give them a stare full of distaste and hatred. In the beginning, I chose to pace back and forth to show I was anxious and worried about the upcoming future. Additionally, I stomped in the beginning, to put emphasis on my anger in the phrase, “to strike him dead.” This stomp showed more than just my fury. It showed a loss of self-control; a sense of recklessness would carry onto the next scene where I fought Romeo and Mercutio. When considering my body posture, I chose to walk with my chin up and good back posture to show confidence in myself. Although I attempted to do this, my walk came out as slow and sluggish. On the other hand, my upper body posture portrayed me as a powerful and confident man. When the attention was on other actors I would stand still and tall while limiting my movement. The purpose of this was to keep the main focus on the actor speaking so I wouldn't distract the audience. Additionally, it showed my ability to hold my ground and that I was not afraid to fight or back down. Lastly, as I am talking I will walk towards the enemy and eventually get in there face to intensify the scene. When I am talking, my movement will draw the audience’s attention to me. Walking towards my enemies will show my aggression and tendency to take action. It shows that I am out for blood and seeking vengeance. Additionally, it will build on the rising action approaching the main fight scene of the play. As we get closer to the climax, I will get closer to my enemy to show the building tensions. As I said the line, “Boy, this shall not excuse the injuries That thou hast done me. Therefore turn and draw.” I got within inches of Romeo’s face to show the rising tensions. This will show Tybalt's despicable personality and immense passion for fighting.
The climax of the play was the fight scene where I would fight Romeo. In this scene, Tybalt has an immense hatred for Romeo, who he has been dying to fight him since he first saw Romeo trespassing in his territory. In this fight, we used fake plastic swords. When fighting we would take turns winning and losing the battle to make the fight more realistic. When losing the battle, I would back up and block the incoming blows, while the person would charge ahead on the offensive. This will show that the fight is close and evenly matched. As the fight continues, the suspense will build in the audience. In the final fight scene, on my second time going on the defensive Romeo would spin and kill me causing me to tumble to the ground. I take a hard fall in order to make the death seem more realistic. The main focus reason for this controlled movement in the fight scene was for the organization. Yet, with all this organization we still missed hits, forcing us to improvise. When we missed a hit we would wait till both people were ready to strike again. After figuring out the movement in the fight I worked on my expressions in the fight scene. My intention was to walk aggressively, except it did not come out that way. My walk was not as aggressive and confident as it needed to be. Additionally, during the fight scene I intended to act both anxious and worried. However, in the fight scene, I was too focused on the hits to notice that I had disregarded facial expressions. Throughout the fight scene, I had a neutral face. It was challenging to express Tybalt's emotions while my mind was concentrating on something else. In this regard, I could have done a better job showing Tybalt's gruesome personality.
In order to accurately express Tybalt, he needed to speak with anger and appear hostile. I showed this ferocity by adjusting my tone of voice, facial expressions, body language, and costuming. When people are angry, they don't talk; they shout. I had to talk with a sense of rage in order to create a more heated environment. However, to illustrate a more venomous character, I could have been louder and fiercer. Yet, the dialogue alone is not enough in that retrospect. I also needed to look infuriated. In order to do this, I separated myself from reality. I made myself believed that I hated my fellow actors while in character. Additionally, I clenched my fists and flexed every muscle in my body. Clenching my fist also triggered a natural feeling of enmity and fury in myself allowing me to stay in character. Flexing makes sense in this regard because it is a natural defense mechanism humans have when they get mad. It shows that he is ready to fight at any moment. Lastly, I wore black to show that I was an evil character, and left my hair a mess to show that I’m an angry person who doesn’t care about anything. This also shows that I’m not afraid of dying, and am reckless. All of this helped build my character to be evil and despicable.
From practicing the play I learned how to more accurately express Tybalt's character. To express Tybalt's confidence, I learned to become louder in addition to speaking and walking with good posture. I learned to incorporate movement to show anxiety, aggression, and power. Throughout the play, I made my facial expressions more menacing to show Tybalt's morbid character. In order to do this, I transcended beyond acting aggravated; I connected with my inner emotions to sincerely feel anger. Overall, I learned a great deal about how to imitate Tybalt’s malicious character.
Yet, from analyzing the text my opinion of Tybalt has greatly changed. At first glance, I thought he was purely a royal tyrant. Except, as I analyzed the play I saw the reason for his chronic brutality. I realized he was nothing more than a ratcatcher. Genuinely, I feel bad for him, because he is merely a pawn to his family. Most people view this story as a tragic love story, but from looking through the eyes of Tybalt I saw another story. I saw a man who is a victim of society, whose only defense mechanism is to fight. Can you really blame a man for murder if he was taught nothing but to kill?
Word count: 1972


Works Cited:
Mahoney, John. Romeo and Juliet, William Shakespeare. London: Letts Educational, 2004. Print.

Danticat Background Info

Biographical info about the author
  • Born January 19, 1969, in Port-au-Prince, Haiti
  • Immigrated to the U.S.
  • Parents escaped Haiti to Brooklyn, New York
  • Writing portrays fiction and nonfiction injustices in Haiti
  • Uncle raised her while her parents were in New York
  • Three themes in her writing
    • National identity
    • Mother-daughter relationship
    • Politics regarding her haitian history

Timeline for Haiti's history from Independence to present
  • 1492: Columbus lands
  • 1592: Spanish governor executes the last Taino chief
  • 1685: Louis XIV enacts Code Noir (Allowing Corporal Punishment)
  • 1758: Rebel leader Mackandal is captured and burned alive
  • 1791: Slave revolt begins
  • 1794: French Assembly end slavery in all colonies
  • 1801: Toussaint L’Ouverture defeats British and Spanish troops
  • 1803-1803: Final years of revolution
  • 1804-1805: Independence
  • 1806: Dessalines is assassinated and Haiti splits into two states
    • Northern state: Controlled by Emperor, Henri Christophe
    • Southern republic: President Alexandre Pétion.
  • 1820: Jean-Pierre Boyer unifies Haiti
  • 1825: France’s King Charles X demands 150 million francs, backed by a fleet of warships.
  • 1844: Dominican Republic declares independence from Haiti.
  • 1937: Dominican Massacre
  • 1930-1961: Rafael Trujillo ruled Dominican Republic
  • 1957 – 1971: President Duvalier (Papa Doc)
  • 1971-1986: President, Jean Claude Duvalier (Baby Doc)

Haiti's fight for and gain of Independence
  • Anti-slave anti-colonial Coup D'etat
  • 1791-1804
  • Greatest slave uprising since Spartacus
  • One of the only slave revolts that lead to a state free of slavery led by non-whites

Toussaint L'Ouverture
  • Black leader (Haitian revolution)
  • Defeated British and Spanish troops
  • Lead the insurgency
  • Military and political leader

Boukman
  • Most known early leader
  • Lead religious ceremonies
  • Marked the beginning of the revolution


1937, Dominican Massacre
  • Dominican troops killed around 10,000 Haitians
  • Aka Parsley massacre

Rafael Trujillo
  • Rafael Trujillo ruled Dominican Republic 1930 - 1961
  • Dominican politician and soldier
  • Dictator
  • 1930 Ruled Dominican Republic
  • 1961 Assassinated
  • Responsible for over 50,000 deaths
  • Brought Prosperity and Stability
  • Non-existent civil rights and liberties

Voodoo religion
  • Official religion of Haiti
  • Spirit inhabit visible world
  • Spirits help govern humanity and the natural world
  • Prayer is rewarded with health, protection, and favor
  • Came from enslaved Africans in Haiti

Duvalier (Papa Doc)
  • 1957 - 1971 President
  • Elected president of Haiti
  • Rule based on military
  • Resulted in 30,000-60,000 murders
  • Before rule - know for fighting diseases
  • Hence Papa Doc

Tonton Macoute
  • Special operations unit created by Duvalier

Jean Claude Duvalier (Baby Doc)

  • President 1971 - 1986
  • Tortured and killed thousands under his presidency
  • World's youngest president at 19

Monday, December 12, 2016

Notes Krik Krak

Mountains?
Travel?
At Sea
People losing their virginity on the boats?
Is she writing to a loved one on land?
and family to boat?
20ish (Age)
past
Boat to America
Erath is a cube old
Diary?
Letters? How? There on a boat???
Not a Diart^
Hole in the boat
cost guard lost??
People wishing death
corrupt society?
Who is this story to? Family? Loved one?
Dad did something bad
daughter on boat writing to family?
college exams?
piss and poop in front of others
soldiers = bad people?
corrupt law
Girl having baby on boat
Throw things in the sea
boat leaking water in need it to be lighter
water leaking, baby not crying
old president never came
more government corruption
passed exams
baby is dead?
threw her baby overboard
It is a diary
throw it over
Finally makes sense family is far from her over the mountains in a corrupt society, she graduated from a university and passed her exams the is on her way to America alone in the sea. now probably dead at the bottom of the ocean :(

Tuesday, December 6, 2016

Draft #2

Jack Hartigan
IB Lit and Perf
Ms. Guarino
December 6, 2016
Fire-Eyed Fury
In class, we performed the classic play Romeo and Juliet, written by William Shakespeare. This is one of the most well-known plays written in the Elizabethan era. In summary, the play is about two star-crossed lovers, living in Verona Italy, who will do anything to be together. Our performance mainly focused on the fight scene in act three scene one. Additionally, I included Tybalt’s monolog in act 1 scene 5. In both of these scenes, Shakespeare uses analytic devices to portray a theme of vengeance and a tone of fury and violence; I illustrated this anger with the use of body language and tone of voice.
Shakespeare was a brilliant man who shows character development in the contrast between Romeo and Tybalt. In the beginning of the play, Romeo felt a great love towards Tybalt. “But love thee better than thou canst devise Till thou shalt know the reason of my love.”(3.1.40-41) In this quote it Romeo refers to how Tybalt is practically his family since Romeo married Tybalt's cousin Juliet earlier. However, Romeo and Juliet are keeping that a secret at the moment so he cannot explain his spontaneous love. This supposed love changes drastically as the scene goes on. At the end, Romeo developed a burning hatred for Tybalt. “And fire-eyed fury be my conduct now! Now, Tybalt, take the villain back again.”(3.1.86) The root of this enmity is Tybalt killing Romeo’s friend Mercutio earlier in the scene. The tension between them leads to the climax where Romeo kills Tybalt. This shows how Romeo changes from a kind-hearted man to a ruthless killer, from the beginning to the end of this scene. It is also ironic that Romeo killed the person who he so-called loved in the earlier scene. This plot development had an astonishing twist where Romeo’s love for Tybalt turned into fire eyed-fury.
Throughout the scene, there is a theme of vengeance where the noble characters follow Hammurabi's code: an eye for an eye. Vengeance seems to be valued above all else: even law and family. It begins with Tybalt wanting revenge on Romeo. “Boy, this shall not excuse the injuries That thou hast done me. Therefore turn and draw.”(3.1.37-38) When Romeo won't fight, Tybalt gets revenge Mercutio instead. After killing Mercutio, Romeo seeks to avenge Mercutio. “Either thou, or I, or both, must go with him.”(3.1.91) In this quote, Romeo tells Tybalt that he will fight him to death. He does this to make things right with his friend. The choices made in this scene foreshadow the future. Even as Mercutio is dying he seeks vengeance on Romeo and Tybalt by cursing them, “A plague o' both your houses!”(3.1.59) This is an example of foreshadowing. There are many ways that this foreshadowing could be interpreted. First off, it could be predicting the immediate future where Tybalt is killed and Romeo is banished. On the other hand, it could be foreshadowing Romeo and Juliet’s deaths where both houses suffer a loss. Once again, this follows the theme of blood for blood and betrayal. Mercutio’s curse was followed by many tragedies for both houses.
In addition to foreshadowing, Shakespeare uses metaphors frequently in his writing that often have a tone of hatred. For example, Tybalt refers to Romeo as a “slave”(1.5.54) to empathize his distaste for Romeo. This implies that Romeo is below him and that he is better than Romeo. Mercutio also uses it by calling Tybalt a “ratcatcher”(3.1.46) to show his hostility towards him. That implies that he is a lower class, and is in a position not worthy of respect. Additionally, he then goes on to say “Good king of cats, nothing but one of your nine lives, that I mean to make bold withal, and, as you shall use me hereafter, dry-beat the rest of the eight.”(3.1.48-50) In this sentence, he uses humor, irony and a metaphor calling Tybalt a king of cats. It is ironic that he would call him a king, and somewhat humorous that he called him a cat. At the same time, it had a serious tone. Mercutio goes off the superstition that cats have nine lives and threatens to take one of Tybalt's lives. Then says he will take the rest of his lives. Essentially, Mercutio is using a metaphor to state that he will slaughter Tybalt. Metaphors are an intellectual way of insulting people showing both intelligence and class. These Metaphors are important for the verbal battles leading up to the fight. These verbal battles are part of the rising action leading up to the climax. Additionally, these metaphors show how there is a tone of fury  and violence throughout the scene. The author uses the terms “outrage”(3.1.54) and “fire-eyed fury”(3.1.86) to express this hatred. Fire-eyed fury is also alliteration. Conflict is frequently shown throughout the play. Shakespeare also uses allusions to express the tone. “O calm, dishonorable, vile submission!”(3.1.44) In this sentence, Shakespeare indirectly references Tybalt using the term vile submission. Another example of an allusion is when Mercutio indirectly references Tybalt by saying, “Good king of cats.”(3.1.48) Which, once again, is related back to the theme of anger, because in this context he is threatening to take Tybalt’s life.
Mercutio also uses personification when he says, “Will you pluck your sword out of his pilcher by the ears?”(3.1.46-47) In this sentence, he describes his sword as having ears. This also shows Mercutio’s cunning use of language. Mercutio is clever in the sense that he can come up with intellectual saying on the spot. Even when he is on the verge of fighting, he is able to use his acute sense of language. Although Mercutio plays a large part, throughout the scene there is an ample use of figurative language from both from Tybalt and Romeo, too.
After memorizing the scene, I acted it out. Acting came with many tedious choices. Every choice I made in this retrospect was to portray Tybalt as an evil but confident character. The first choice I had to make involved my positioning. I chose to face slightly towards the audience to so they could see me, but at the same time, I could be looking at the other two actors. When looking at them I would give them a stare full of distaste and hatred. In the beginning, I chose to pace back and forth. This showed that I was anxious and possibly worried about the upcoming future. Additionally, I stomped in the beginning, to put emphasis on my anger in a line. This stomp showed more than just my fury. It showed a loss of self-control. A sense of recklessness would carry onto the next scene where I fought Romeo and Mercutio. I walked with my chin up and good back posture to show confidence in myself. Although I attempted to do this, my walk came out as slow and sluggish. On the other hand, my upper body posture portrayed me as a powerful and confident man. When the attention was on other actors I would stand still and tall while limiting my movement. This is so I don’t take attention away from the main focus or distract the audience. Additionally, it showed my ability to hold my ground and that I was not afraid to fight or back down. Lastly, as I am talking I will walk towards the enemy and eventually get in there face. This will help intensify the play. When I am talking the focus will be on me, and my movement will help draw their focus on me. Walking towards them will show my aggression and tendency to take action. It shows that I am out for blood and seeking vengeance. Additionally, it will show the rising action approaching the main fight scene of the play. As we get closer to the climax, I will get closer to my enemy to show the building tensions.
The climax of the play was the fight scene where I would fight Romeo. In this scene Tybalt should have an immense hatred for Romeo, he has been dying to fight him since I first saw Romeo trespassing in his territory. In this fight, we used fake swords in addition to planning out the movements. We would take turns winning and losing the battle to make the fight more realistic. It would also show that the fight was close and evenly matched. As the fight continues, the suspense will also build in the audience. On my second time going back, Romeo would spin and kill me causing me to tumble to the ground. A hard fall would make my death more realistic. The main focus of this controlled movement was for the organization. Yet, with all this organization we still missed hits, forcing us to improvise. When we missed a hit we would wait till both people would strike again. After figuring out the movement of the fight I moved on to expressions in the fight scene. My intention was to walk aggressively in the fight scene, although it did not come out that way. My walk was not as aggressive as it needed to be. Additionally, during the fight scene I intended to act both anxious and worried. However, in the fight scene, I was too focused on the hits to notice that I had disregarded facial expressions. Throughout the fight scene, I had a neutral face. It was challenging to express Tybalt's emotions while my mind was concentrating on something else.
In order to act like Tybalt, I had to talk with anger and hostility. When people are angry, they don't talk; they shout. I had to talk with a sense of rage in order to create a more heated conversation. However, when acting with hatred I could have been louder and more fierce.  Yet, the dialogue was not enough in that retrospect. I also needed to look mad. In order to do this, I separated myself from reality and believed for the moment that I hated my partner. Additionally, I clenched my fists and flexed every muscle in my body. Clenching my fist also triggered a feeling of enmity and fury in myself allowing me to stay in character. Tybalt would also be tense because he is ready to fight. This is a natural defense mechanism humans have when they get mad.
Lastly to represent my character I had to wear the right outfit. I wore black to show that I was an evil character, and left my hair a mess to show that I’m an angry person who doesn’t care about anything. This also shows that I’m not afraid of dying, and reckless. All of this helped build on my character.
From practicing the play I improved in many areas. As I became more comfortable with the play I learned to become louder in addition to speaking and walking with confidence. I learned to incorporate movement when the attention is on me, but limit it when it’s on someone else. Throughout the play, I made my sword fights and facial expressions more realistic. Even though my facial expressions improved tremendously, there is still work to be done in that retrospect. Overall, I did an outstanding job performing the play.
From analyzing the stylistic devices, I was able to assess that Tybalt is an evil and ill-minded character. These stylistic devices added to the themes of anger and vengeance. As I worked on the play, I used physical and verbal traits to express Tybalt as an angry and confident character.  In this play, I successfully portrayed Tybalt as cynical and malevolent being he is.
Word count: 1969

Works Cited:

Mahoney, John. Romeo and Juliet, William Shakespeare. London: Letts Educational, 2004. Print.

Saturday, December 3, 2016


Hamlet
2
6
2

This play was satisfactory at best. It was disorganized and had grammar mistakes. Additionally, the transitions for sentence to sentence we not sufficient enough.
He did a good job citing the text but a lot of it was him describing and summarizing the play when he could have been talking about why he made the choices he did in the play. Additionally, in some occasions he strays off topic from the focus of the essay. More over, the title is very long and wordy.
However, he did a help decent job talking about how he acted out the play. Although, he did get off topic occasionally, he did a good job talking about why he made his decisions in the play. He used a fair amount of text evidence too. Most of what he said was backed up by evidence or came from an analysis of the text.
However his analysis of literary features was very limited. All though he did talk about it, he did not go into debt in this category. He spent the majority of his essay on other topics. Although he did cite the text and analyze it he did not connect it to many literary features.
Overall, the quality of this essay was decent and if I were to give him a paper grade, I would give him a 80 although there is no rubric for this.

Richard III
5
8
5

Overall this person did a phenomenal job. There work is quality. Although this person did not get a perfect score, I think it is A+ work. This writer obviously knew how to write.
The writer was very organized. I liked how he separated each category into separate paragraphs. All his sentences had a good flow to them. Additionally, there were good transitions. The thesis to the essay was beyond good. It did a perfect job of summarizing the following text. Additionally, the author had a wide vocabulary range that his used cunningly in the first paragraph. I especially like the word tyrant. Besides this writer's astonishing organization, he also had quality literary analysis skills.
Somehow the writer managed to incorporate literary analysis  and features into his writing subtly. I like how he would sight text evidence, explain it, then talk about the literary devises used. This shows that he had a keen understanding of literary featured. Also he used literary features that are uncommon, which I found impressive. The literary features he added built to his writing greatly.
Although, he described his choices made, he could have done a better job at describing them. When he wrote about them he did a quality job. Additionally, the diagram was a nice touch. Yet, there were some tiny flaws that cost him points. First off at times, his analysis seemed like a summary. In this essay you are supposed to avoid summarizing the text. Additionally, a large part of his writing was literary analysis. This is a problem because this is supposed to be the main part of the essay. Besides those two small details the writer did a phenomenal job wiring the paper.

Friday, December 2, 2016

3 He did not analyze many literary features
6 He talked about background too much
4 His writing was pretty good, but could have been more organised
From analyzing the text, I concluded that I needed to portray an evil and confident character. (From reading the play I antlyzed Tybalt as an exil charactor...) Not finished thought

Thursday, December 1, 2016

Rough Draft #1

Jack Hartigan
IB Lit and Perf
Ms. Guarino
December 1 2016
Fire-Eyed Fury
In class, we performed the classic play Romeo and Juliet, written by Shakespeare. This play was written in the Elizabethan era and is one of the most notorious plays written in the history of mankind. This play is about two star crossed lovers, living in Verona Italy, who will do anything to be together. Our skit showed the fight scene in act 1 scene 5 containing only Mercutio, Tybalt, and Romeo. In which, the point of view is based around romeo. From analyzing the text, I concluded that I needed to portray an evil and confident character.
Shakespeare was a brilliant man who used many laterality devices such as characterization in this act. In the beginning of the play, Romeo felt a great love towards Tybalt. “But love thee better than thou canst devise Till thou shalt know the reason of my love.”(3.1.40-41) Then at the end, Romeo developed a burning hatred for Tybalt. “And fire-eyed fury be my conduct now! Now, Tybalt, take the villain back again.”(3.1.86) This shows how Romeo changes from a kind-hearted man to a ruthless killer, from the beginning to the end of this scene. It is also ironic that Romeo killed the person who he so-called loved in the earlier scene. This characterization goes along with the theme of the scene.
Throughout the scene there is a theme of vengeance. It begins with Tybalt wanting Vengeance on Romeo. “Boy, this shall not excuse the injuries That thou hast done me. Therefore turn and draw.”(3.1.37-38) When Romeo won't fight Tybalt takes vengeance on Mercutio instead. After killing Mercutio Romeo goes to seek vengeance on Tybalt. “Either thou, or I, or both, must go with him.”(3.1.91) In this quote Romeo tells Tybalt that he will fight him to the death. He does this to make things right with his friend. The choices made in this scene foreshadow the future.
When Mercutio dies he says, “A plague o' both your houses!”(3.1.59) This is an example of foreshadowing. There are many ways that this foreshadowing could be interpreted. First off, it could be predicting the immediate future where Tybalt is killed and Romeo is banished. On the other hand, it could be foreshadowing Romeo and Juliet’s deaths where both houses suffer a loss.
In addition to foreshadowing, Shakespeare uses metaphors to frequently in his writing. For example, Tybalt refers to Romeo as a “slave”(1.5.54) to empathize his hatred for Romeo. Mercutio also uses it for name calling. He calls Tybalt a “ratcatcher”(3.1.46) to show his  hatred for him. Additionally, he then goes on to say “Good king of cats, nothing but one of your nine lives, that I mean to make bold withal, and, as you shall use me hereafter, dry-beat the rest of the eight.”(3.1.48-50) In this sentence, he uses a metaphor calling Tybalt a cat. He then goes off the superstition that cats have nine lives and threatens to take one of Tybalt's lives. Then he says he will take the rest of his lives. Essentially, Mercutio is using a metaphor to state that he will slaughter Tybalt.
This shows how there is a tone of anger  and violence throughout the scene. The author uses the terms “outrage”(3.1.54) and “fire-eyed fury”(3.1.86) to express this hatred. Fire-eyed fury is also alliteration. This tone is frequently expressed throughout the play. Shakespeare also uses allusions to express this tone. “O calm, dishonorable, vile submission!”(3.1.44) In this sentence Shakespeare indirectly references Tybalt using the term vile submission. Another example of an allusion is when Mercutio indirectly references Tybalt by saying, “Good king of cats.”(3.1.48)
Mercutio also uses personification when he says, “Will you pluck your sword out of his pilcher by the ears?”(3.1.46-47) In this sentence, he describes his sword as having ears. Throughout the scene there is an ample use of figurative language from both from Tybalt, Mercutio, and Romeo.
After memorising the scene I acted it out. Acting it was full of many tedious choices. Every choice I made on this retrospect was to portray Tybalt as an evil but confident character. The first choice I had to make involved my positioning. I chose to face slightly towards the audience to so they could see me, but at the same time I could be looking at the other two actors. In the beginning I chose to pace back and forth. Additionally, I added a stomp in the beginning to put emphasis on my anger in a line. This showed that I was anxious and possibly worried about the upcoming future. When I walked I had my chin up and good back posture to show confidence in myself. When the attention was on other actors I would stand still and tall but limit my movement. This is so I don’t take attention away from the main focus or distract the audience. Lastly, as I am talking I will walk towards the enemy and get in there face. This will help intensify the play. Additionally, it will show the rising action approaching the main fight scene of the play.
The climax of the play was the fight scene where I would fight Romeo.  In this fight we used fake swords. In this fight we planned out the movement. We would take turns winning and losing the battle. This was to help make the fight more realistic. On my second time losing back Romeo would spin and kill me causing me to pumble to the ground. After figuring out the movement of the fight I moved on to the next task.
In order to act like Tybalt, I also had to talk like him. When people are angry, they don't talk, they shout. I had to talk with a sense of hatred. Yet, dialogue was not enough, I also needed to look mad. In order to do this I separated myself from reality and believed for the moment that I hated my partner. Additionally, I clenched my fists and flexed every muscle in my body. This is a natural defence mechanism humans have when they get mad.
Lastly to represent my character I had to wear the right outfit. I wore black to show that I was and evil character, and left my hair a mess to show that I’m an angry person who doesn’t care about anything. All of this helped build on my character.
From practicing the play I improved in many area’s. As I became more comfortable with the play I became louder and spoke with more confidence, and learned to walk with confidence. I learned to incorporate movement when the attention is on me, but limit it when it’s on someone else. Throughout the play I made my sword fights and facial expressions more realistic. Even though my facial expressions improved tremendously, there is still work to be done in that retrospect. Also, I can improve my walk so that I walk more like Tybalt and walk with anger. Overall, I did a great job performing the play.
This scene contained many literary devices that allowed us to act it out better. As I worked on the play I shaped Tybalt’s expression to look like an angry and confident character. It is this shaping of the character that has lead my play to success.


Works Cited:
Mahoney, John. Romeo and Juliet, William Shakespeare. London: Letts Educational, 2004. Print.